Poem Honest Me| Poem

tay848

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I wrote this poem recently, inspired by you all:

This is me
Honest me
The real me
Some people don't like how it be
My smile isn't great
I love to debate
You see?
That's just me
I may not say much
I may not socialize much
But what I will do
Is be the best version of me

You see,
That's just how it needs to be.
I may not like big crowds,
But I will make you feel like you're in the clouds.
I may not have all the means,
But I will tell you how awesome you look in those jeans.
I may not be your smartest friend,
But I will stick with you until the end.
I may not know how to talk,
But I will be your only rock.

Some will come and go,
But know, I will never leave you alone.
I know how that feels and I know that hurts,
So, I will never leave you on the outskirts.
Sometimes people leave ,
But I will stay with you forever, even on Christmas Eve.

With that said,
I hope you don't leave me even when you're dead.
I hope you know friends are hard to catch,
But man, do we make a great match.
So that's me,
That's how I aught to be.
Know that I feel deep,
Know that when you are sad, I also weep.
But that's me,
The best me that I can be.


~Tay8481228 | Moderator
 

Froxinite

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Oh gosh, Tay, this was really nice.
I know I haven't been apart of the community for all too long, but I think when I say this, I can speak for all; this was absolutely amazing, and I appreciate that you wrote this poem because you were inspired by us.
I write poems too, not well, but I still do. My friend, however, he's real good. I'll give you the advice he gave me.
Using websites that give you rhyming words aren't embarrassing, and can always inspire you to write better lines.
Always read back, because your rhythm can be worked on. (Not you specifically, I meant overall.)
There are multiple poem pages where you can post your poems and get very nice and helpful criticism.

My favorite stanza has to be:
Some will come and go,
But know, I will never leave you alone.
I know how that feels and I know that hurts,
So, I will never leave you on the outskirts.
Sometimes people leave ,
But I will stay with you forever, even on Christmas Eve.

Great poem, once again. I hope to see more work from you. ^^
-Froxinite
 
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